President's Address Redline

A working draft document crucial for the President's speech preparation found in the Communications Office.

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S1E3 · A Proportional Response

Bullpen Triage: Missile Clarification and a Quiet Apology

The multi-page redlined draft of the President's address is the battleground for Toby and Sam's edits. It receives urgent corrections and is the document Cathy references when assuring staff that a corrected version will be issued.

Before: On Toby's office desk, margins marked with deletions and insertions, under active revision.

After: Updated to reflect the correction; slated for release as 'coming out on the redline.'

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S1E3 · A Proportional Response

Polishing the Address — Moral Language, Technical Truth, and a Quiet Apology

The multi-page redlined draft of the President's address is the material locus of the debate — Toby and Sam edit its phrasing, Cathy reports which changes will appear 'on the redline,' and the document's revisions determine what will be said publicly.

Before: A working draft with margin edits and deletions in progress; actively being redlined by communications staff.

After: Updated to reflect the paragraph removal and adjective changes; marked as incoming for distribution on the official redline.

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