Redlined Paragraph (President's Draft — Missile Nomenclature Passage)

A single printed paragraph ripped or copied from the President's draft, occupying one column on a letter‑sized sheet and mottled with pencil marks, redline annotations, and marginal corrections. The paper looks repeatedly handled—creased and smudged—as Toby, C.J., Sam, and other staffers jab at specific words (notably a misnamed missile), circle phrases, and pass the page back and forth during urgent edits.

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2 moments

S1E3 · A Proportional Response

Bullpen Triage: Missile Clarification and a Quiet Apology

A singled-out redlined paragraph — likely the one naming the weapon — is the immediate focus: Sam cut it earlier, C.J. references its problematic language, and Toby demands a technical fix so that fragment will not mislead readers or analysts.

Before: Previously edited and cut by Sam; circulated among staff as the contested copy.

After: Acknowledged as removed/altered and will be corrected or omitted in the redline issuance.

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S1E3 · A Proportional Response

Polishing the Address — Moral Language, Technical Truth, and a Quiet Apology

A specific printed paragraph — repeatedly handled, then cut by Sam — functions narratively as the expendable textual element sacrificed in the hurry to tighten the message; its removal is noted aloud and affects the final address shape.

Before: Part of the draft, handled and marked with annotations.

After: Removed (cut) from the draft and noted as coming out on the redline.

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